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What is something that you would have a hard time giving up and why?
-> My Lego bricks are somethings that I would have a hard time giving up.
First, I spent lots of money for my Lego bricks.
Second, I spent lots of times with my Lego bricks.
That's why my Lego bricks are somethings that I would have a hard time giving up.

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Hi John! Your Lego really means a lot to you. That's nice. Take good care of them so when you grow up, you have something to look back for. Anyways, thank you for sharing. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

My Lego bricks are somethings that I would have a hard time giving up.
>> My Legos are some of the things that is hard to give up. 

First, I spent lots of money for my Lego bricks.
>> I spent a lot of money for my Lego bricks. 

Second, I spent lots of times with my Lego bricks.
>> I also spend a lot of time and effort building my Lego bricks. 

That's why my Lego bricks are somethings that I would have a hard time giving up.
>> That's why these are the things that would be hard for me to resist. 
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