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What is something that you would have a hard time giving up and why?

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I think it's hard to get on a diet. Because the world is big and there's a lot to eat. If I eat everything I want, I gain weight and my health gets bad, so I always have to fight with food. So I eat vegetables and meat and I work out at the gym, but sometimes it's hard to resist food that I want to eat. Whenever I'm tired, I don't want to exercise. So I'm fixing my mind with the thought that I can do it every day.

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Hi Sarah! Food is definitely something that is hard to resist. Take it from me. Since the start of the pandemic, I gained so much weight because I am a sucker for food.  Hahahaha!  Anyways, thank you for sharing. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

I think it's hard to get on a diet. 
>> I think it's hard to go on a diet because the world is big and there's a lot to eat. 

Because the world is big and there's a lot to eat. 
>> CONNECT THIS SENTENCE ABOVE

If I eat everything I want, I gain weight and my health gets bad, so I always have to fight with food. 
>>If I eat everything I want, I gain weight and my health is at risk so I always have to fight with food. 
 OR : If I eat everything I want, I gain weight and my health is at risk so I have this constant battle with food. 

So I eat vegetables and meat and I work out at the gym, but sometimes it's hard to resist food that I want to eat. 
>> So I eat vegetables and meat. I also work out at the gym but sometimes it's hard to resist the food that I want to eat. 

Whenever I'm tired, I don't want to exercise. 
>>CORRECT

So I'm fixing my mind with the thought that I can do it every day.
>> So I'm focusing my mind the thought that I can do it everyday. 
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