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There is a Korean proverb that you can't spit on a smiling face. It means, everyone likes a smiling face. I saw some article on the website.
Some Korean were killed in the Philippines. According to the article, they are so rude, they had treated Filipinos as slaves, and they had boasted their properties to neighbors. To sum up, they had acted badly as much as being killed. So I think that,the way of protection ourselves from being a victim of a crime is to be polite, and avoid places where are easy to occur crimes.

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There is a Korean proverb that you can't spit on a smiling face.
>>> There is a Korean proverb that says; you can't spit on a smiling face.

It means, everyone likes a smiling face. 
>>>  CORRECT
OR: A person cannot do bad thing on a person who smiles a lot. 

I saw some article on the website.
>>> I saw some articles on the website.

Some Korean were killed in the Philippines. According to the article, they are so rude, they had treated Filipinos as slaves, and they had boasted their properties to neighbors. 
>>> Some Koreans were killed in the Philippines. According to the article, they are so rude, they had treated Filipinos as slaves, and they had boasted their properties to their neighbors. 

To sum up, they had acted badly as much as being killed. 
>>> To sum up, they had acted badly for them to be killed. 
OR: They have acted so badly that they ended up being killed.

So I think that,the way of protection ourselves from being a victim of a crime is to be polite, and avoid places where are easy to occur crimes.
>>> So I think that the best way of protecting ourselves from being a victim of a crime is to be polite and to avoid places where crimes occur easily.
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