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14-year-old dog.

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My dog is 14 years old. Her name is Kkotnim. Kkot means a flower and Nim means Ms.
My family call her by nickname Kkokko because she sound like "kkokkokko"
She is my everything and my heart. She has many disease which are heart, liver and kidney disease and she should take medication twice a day. Spending with her is my happiest time so I have not traveled anywhere for severeal years. Every holiday I go to the park, sea and mountain with her. She had a sister that had heart disease. Her sister had gone to heaven last year. That time my heart broke down. I have had her ash in a pottery and put it on the table with her picture. When I see the picture, my tears flow down.
She love walking outside most and she like fresh cold water drinking and meat. She is white Maltease. < I saw the class schedule. March 1st is marked as scheduled for class, what happened? I don't mind having a class or not. >

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Hello MS. Alice, happy holiday to you. I feel emotional too about your dogs, you love them dearly. Keep up the good work in writing, and I will check your schedule with our managers, as I know it was on hold too for today. Thank you, and see you next time. =)
~~ T. Ali =)
My dog is 14 years old. Her name is Kkotnim. Kkot means a flower and Nim means Ms.
>> Correct
My family call her by nickname Kkokko because she sound like "kkokkokko"
>> My family call her by nickname Kkokko because she sounds like "kkokkokko" all the time.
She is my everything and my heart.
>> Correct
She has many disease which are heart, liver and kidney disease and she should take medication twice a day. 
>> She has many diseases which are in the heart; she also has liver and kidney diseases and she should take medication twice a day. 
Spending with her is my happiest time so I have not traveled anywhere for several years. 
>> Correct
Every holiday I go to the park, sea and mountain with her. She had a sister that had heart disease. Her sister had gone to heaven last year. 
>> Correct
That time my heart broke down.
>> That time I had a heart ache. 
I have had her ash in a pottery and put it on the table with her picture. When I see the picture, my tears flow down.
>> Correct
She love walking outside most and she like fresh cold water drinking and meat. 
>> She loves walking outside the most and she likes drinking fresh cold water  and eating meat. 
She is white Maltease. 
>> She is a white Maltese. 
< I saw the class schedule. March 1st is marked as scheduled for class, what happened? I don't mind having a class or not. >
>> Correct
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