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Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think kids should learn while they are still young?
I think kids should learn manners like table manners.
An example of Korean table manner is don't sneeze when you are eating, don't eat faster than adolts.
And foreign country's table manner is don't put your elbow on the table, don't talk while you are eating.
I think kids should learn manners while they are still young! They should learn foreign manners too!

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           Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think kids should learn while they are still young?


I think kids should learn manners like table manners.
>> I think kids should learn manners like table etiquette.

An example of Korean table manner is don't sneeze when you are eating, don't eat faster than adolts.
>> Some examples of Korean table manners are not sneezing when you are eating, or not eating faster than adults.

And foreign country's table manner is don't put your elbow on the table, don't talk while you are eating.
>> And in western countries, putting your elbows on the table or talking while you are eating is considered impolite. 

I think kids should learn manners while they are still young!
>> correct

They should learn foreign manners too!
>> They should learn good manners from foreign countries, too!

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