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I want to meet BTS if I could meet any famous person. I ¡®m not sure that I would have a chance to meet BTS. There are lots of things I want to ask to them. I want to hear some advice and learn some skills that can help me with doing this job. And I just want to tell them you guys are my rile model.

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Hi Heidi!  Omg, I want to meet them too! :( Maybe someday you would get the chance to meet them, right? Let's hope for the best. Anyways, thank you for sharing. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

I want to meet BTS if I could meet any famous person. 
>> CORRECT

I ¡®m not sure that I would have a chance to meet BTS. 
>> I'm not sure if I would have the chance to meet them. 

There are lots of things I want to ask to them. 
>> There are a lot of things I want to ask them 

I want to hear some advice and learn some skills that can help me with doing this job. 
>>CORRECT

And I just want to tell them you guys are my rile model.
>> And I just want to tell them that they are my role models. 
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