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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time

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Students are required to do unpaid community work for university entrance. I thought it help students learning relationship, communication skill, and attitude in the society. If people haven't experienced these activity, they might have problem with their colleagues someday. However, there have been a lot of changes at work, school and our life. We feel uncomfortable if we don't get proper reward. Old generation used to do overtime work without additional salary but young people have raised these issues and we could finally get exact compensation as they work. With this view, unpaid community work have to be changed. Even though, students do voluntary service, they have to be paid from facility. However, they get points for their entrance exam so wage should be lower than regular workers. Government and the ministry of education have to reform a bill regarding this activity and provide proper reward.

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Hi MR. HWANG~! ^^ Thanks for your ideas! Keep it up! I appreciate that you work independently and takes pride in work well done
Have a good one~! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Students are required to do unpaid community work for university entrance.
>>> CORRECT
I thought it help students learning relationship, communication skill, and attitude in the society.
>>> I thought it helps students learning relationship, communication skill, and attitude in the society.
 If people haven't experienced these activity, they might have problems with their colleagues someday.
>>> CORRECT
 However, there have been a lot of changes at work, school and our life.
>>> CORRECT
 We feel uncomfortable if we don't get proper rewards. 
>>> CORRECT
Old generation used to do overtime work without additional salary but young people have raised these issues and we could finally get exact compensation as they work. 
>>> CORRECT
With this view, unpaid community work have to be changed. 
>>> With this view, unpaid community work has to be changed. 
Even though, students do voluntary service, they have to be paid from facility.
>>> Even though, students do voluntary service, they have to be paid for the used  facilities.
 However, they get points for their entrance exam so wages should be lower than regular workers. 
>>> CORRECT
Government and the ministry of education have to reform a bill regarding this activity and provide proper reward.
>>> CORRECT
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