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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using social media accounts?
-> The advantages of using social media accounts is we can see each us to online.
We don't have to meet us to offline if we can't meet us to offline.
The disadvantages of using social media accounts is somebody can get our information.
And if somebody get a information, he or she can use our information to other accounts.
These are the advantages and disadvantages of using media accounts.

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Hi John! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

The advantages of using social media accounts is we can see each us to online.
>>The advantages of using social media accounts is we can see each other online.

We don't have to meet us to offline if we can't meet us to offline.
>> We don't have to meet face to face if we can meet through online. 

The disadvantages of using social media accounts is somebody can get our information.
>> The disadvantage of social media accounts is that someone can get your information.

And if somebody get a information, he or she can use our information to other accounts.
>> If somebody gets your information, he/she may use it illegally. 

These are the advantages and disadvantages of using media accounts.
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