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These days, many countries are trying to do online classes instead of face to face classes due to Covid-19. There are both advantages and disadvantages of each class. This essay will discuss both points of view of taking face to face classes.
On the positive side, students will be able to concentrate harder on your study because there'll be less distraction than if you were at home. Second, face to face classes can also improve students¡¯ social skills. By hanging with different friends, students can build their organizational skills.
On the negative side, there are also drawbacks of face to face classes. First, there are travel time and cost. Second, attendance times can be restrictive or inconvenient. It can lessen the efficiency.
In conclusion, there are both merits and demerits of each class. Each country should choose better chances for students by considering their circumstances.

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Hi Emily! I appreciate the essay that you have written. You have expressed both sides with wit. There will always be advantages and disadvantages in everything that we do. It's all up to you on how you're going to handle it. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

These days, many countries are trying to do online classes instead of face to face classes due to Covid-19.
>>CORRECT

 There are both advantages and disadvantages of each class. 
>>CORRECT

This essay will discuss both points of view of taking face to face classes.
>> CORRECT

On the positive side, students will be able to concentrate harder on your study because there'll be less distraction than if you were at home.
>> On the positive side, students will be able to concentrate harder on their  studies because there'll be less distractions than if you were at home.

 Second, face to face classes can also improve students¡¯ social skills. By hanging with different friends, students can build their organizational skills.
>> Second, face to face classes can also improve students¡¯ social skills by hanging with different friends. Students can also build their organizational skills.


On the negative side, there are also drawbacks of face to face classes. First, there are travel time and cost. Second, attendance times can be restrictive or inconvenient. It can lessen the efficiency.
>>There are also drawbacks of face to face classes. First, there's the travel time and expenses. Second, the attendance can be restrictive or inconvenient. It can lessen the efficiency of education.


In conclusion, there are both merits and demerits of each class. Each country should choose better chances for students by considering their circumstances.
>>CORRECT
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