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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using social media accounts?

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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using social media accounts?

SNS is good for my history. For example, today what I did and eat something. Later, these recorded in my history. Sometimes they feel like my photo album.
But, I don¡¯t want to know about my life who don¡¯t know me.

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Hi Monica! I appreciate the essay that you have written. You have expressed you opinion with wit. There will always be advantages and disadvantages in everything that we do. It's all up to you on how you're going to handle it. :) I do agree that social media brings convenience to us a lot. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

-Teacher Elise 

SNS is good for my history.
>> I think SNS is good for recording my everyday routine. 

For example, today what I did and eat something.
>> For example, it records all the things that I did and eat today. 

Later, these recorded in my history. 
>>CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE

Sometimes they feel like my photo album.
>> Sometimes they feel like my personal photo album. 

But, I don¡¯t want to know about my life who don¡¯t know me.
>> Although, I don't want people, whom I don't know, to know things about me. 
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