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These days, apartments price are too expensive to buy, so they rent apartments.
The good thing about living in a rented apartment is that you can get the apartment you want at a low price.
But put it is hard to nail or decorate it the way they want it to.
Also there is disadvantage of having to move two years or to move when rent price increases.
I think if they have enough money, it would be better to buy a apartment.

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Hi there Eden! Thank you for the class today. I always have a great time with you. Thanks for doing your homework too! ^^ Have a good time today! Enjoy your lunch!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
These days, apartments price are too expensive to buy, so they rent apartments.
>>> These days, apartments' prices are too expensive, so they rent apartments.
The good thing about living in a rented apartment is that you can get the apartment you want at a low price.
>>> CORRECT
But put it is hard to nail or decorate it the way they want it to.
>>> CORRECT
Also there is disadvantage of having to move two years or to move when rent price increases.
>>> Also, there is a disadvantage of having to move in two years or to move when rentals increase.
I think if they have enough money, it would be better to buy a apartment.
>>> I think, if they have enough money, it would be better to buy an apartment.
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