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I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Online communication is do online, there may be limitations is conveying one's opinions in detail.
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They often work fron home because of the corona virus and this also seems to have affected using online communication.

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I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
>>> CORRECT
Online communication is do online, there may be limitations is conveying one's opinions in detail.
>>> Online communication is done online. There may be limitations which convey one's opinions in detail.
But they can communication online anywhere.
>>> But they can communicate online anywhere.
It is also comfortable because the are no restrictions.
>>> CORRECT
They often work fron home because of the corona virus and this also seems to have affected using online communication.
>>> They often work from home because of the coronavirus and this also seems to have affecting online communication.

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