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At first, I hate any discrimination so I also have a negative opinion about the ageism. As I said, older people are the same person with younger people. Of course there are some older people who have old-fashioned thoughts and they would be damage to younger people. In this situation we have to block them to save the public. I think this block can be the other kind of discrimination. But almost occasion, we must respect older people as well as younger people and we must try to remove the phrase 'discrimination against older people'.

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Hi again Alice!
Very good thought put into this homework!
I also agree!
Have a good day!



At first, I hate any discrimination so I also have a negative opinion about the ageism. 
>>CORRECT

As I said, older people are the same person with younger people. 
>>As I said, older people are also people like younger people. 

Of course there are some older people who have old-fashioned thoughts and they would be damage to younger people. 
>>Of course there are some older people who have old-fashioned or traditional thoughts and they would be discriminated by younger people.

In this situation we have to block them to save the public.
>>CORRECT

 I think this block can be the other kind of discrimination.
>>I think blocking them can be another kind of discrimination.

 But almost occasion, we must respect older people as well as younger people and we must try to remove the phrase 'discrimination against older people'.
>>But, on most occasions, we must respect older people as well as younger people and we must try to remove the phrase "discrimination against older people". 
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