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I enjoy the heat of the sun a little bit.

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Enjoy the heat of the sun is sometimes very hot, but sometimes very warm. I love to play outside, but I don't like getting wet, when I run very much, but sometimes heat of the sun is good at our health. In sweat, there are a lot of bad thing, if we exercise very hard then sweat are get out of my body. That means I exercised very hard! These is the good thing about heat of the sun, but It become very lazy then we do exercising this is bad thing about heat of the sun. That's why I enjoy the heat of the sun a little bit. (Just half*^^*)

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Friday greetings Maria!

Enjoying the heat of the sun is when you are at the beach and want some sun tan. However, we Asians are not very fond of that. We love being fair with our skin and complexion. However, sometimes, we need the heat of the sun for some vitamins for it. Having too much of it too can make us sick.

So, just enough of the sun's heat is what we need. Enjoy the sun moderately.

Very good on this essay, Maria. See you!

-T. Donna =)

Enjoy the heat of the sun is sometimes very hot, but sometimes very warm. 
>> Enjoying the heat of the sun is sometimes very hot, but sometimes very warm. 

I love to play outside, but I don't like getting wet, when I run very much, but sometimes heat of the sun is good at our health. 
>> I love to play outside, but I don't like getting wet. When I run a lot sometimes, the heat of the sun is good for our health.  

In sweat, there are a lot of bad thing, if we exercise very hard then sweat are get out of my body. 
>>In sweat, there are a lot of bad things. If we exercise very hard then sweat are get out of my body. 

That means I exercised very hard! These is the good thing about heat of the sun, but It become very lazy then we do exercising this is bad thing about heat of the sun. 
>> That means I exercised very hard! This is a good thing about the heat of the sun but I becomes very lazy when we do exercise. This is bad thing about the heat of the sun. 

That's why I enjoy the heat of the sun a little bit. (Just half*^^*)
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