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In 100 years from now, how different do you think the natural world will be?

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I think nature conservation is well preserved. Because there are many natural destructions now and many animals and plants have become extinct. So many countries felt a crisis and blocked people from entering and setting up protection zones to preserve nature. In 100 years, science and technology will have developed more than now, so I expect that they would have preserved nature more effectively.

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I think nature conservation is well preserved. 
>> I think nature conservation will be well preserved. 

Because there are many natural destructions now and many animals and plants have become extinct. 
>> There are many natural destructions. A lot of animals and plants have become extinct. 

So many countries felt a crisis and blocked people from entering and setting up protection zones to preserve nature. 
>> Many countries have felt crisis to the point wherein they didn't allow people entering their premises. They are also setting up protection zones to preserve nature. 

In 100 years, science and technology will have developed more than now, so I expect that they would have preserved nature more effectively.
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