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In 100 years from now, how different do you think the natural world will be?
-> I think lots of animal species would extinct because of environment unclean.
First, there are lots of garbage that processing environment unclean such as plastic.
Second, lots of sea animals are eating some plastics that people threw out to sea.
Third, it is being hotter than before because of greenhouse effect.
That's why I am thinking lots of animal species can extinct because of somethings that making environment unclean.

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Hi John! I feel the same way. Human kind are doing so many things that actually harm our world. Let's just hope that it will not prolong. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think lots of animal species would extinct because of environment unclean.
>> I think lots of animal species would extinct because then environment is unclean. 

First, there are lots of garbage that processing environment unclean such as plastic.
>> First, there are lots of garbage that makes the environment unclean such as plastic.

Second, lots of sea animals are eating some plastics that people threw out to sea.
>> Second, lots of sea animals are eating plastics that people threw out to the bodies of water. 

Third, it is being hotter than before because of greenhouse effect.
>> Lastly, it is going to be hotter than before because of the greenhouse effect. 

That's why I am thinking lots of animal species can extinct because of somethings that making environment unclean.
>> That's why I think that a lot of animals will be extinct if people continu
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