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Some believe that to take more action because crime is constantly happening.
On the contrary, some believe that this is the only crime that is taking place because the act is being taken.
I think that more action should be taken to prevent crime.
More and more crimes are happening around the world and bad crimes are happening.
If the action is done better than now, the crimes could be a little less.

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Hi there Eden! ^^ Thanks for your time today! I appreciate when you're always doing your best in class. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Some believe that to take more action because crime is constantly happening.
>>> Some believe in taking more actions because crime is constantly happening.
On the contrary, some believe that this is the only crime that is taking place because the act is being taken.
>>> CORRECT
I think that more action should be taken to prevent crime.
>>> I think that more actions should be taken to prevent crimes.
More and more crimes are happening around the world and bad crimes are happening.
>>> More and more bad crimes are happening around the world.
If the action is done better than now, the crimes could be a little less.
>>> CORRECT
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