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[Online Pub] Show us your traditional drinks

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Do you think there is any other way to make strangers get to know each other quickly besides drinking?
It is not of course, huh?

So this time, We will use the power of alcohol to get to know each other better.
As you already could guess from the title, We will have a fun time introducing each countries' traditional or famous alcohol this time.

Please bring one that you want to introduce to us, and describe it as much as you can in detail so we can imagine it the best.
and also, freely drink your own drinks and talk about fun memories related to alcohol.
Even if you get drunk, it still will be ok because you are in your safe zone.

Let's blow our stress by doing this and have a fun Sunday together!

P.S.
Please DM me about what kind of alcohol you are going to introduce us and what fun memories do you have related to it?

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Hello Kwang Min!  Check below for the corrections I made on your work. There were just minor corrections. See if you can use this in your online content. Have a good day!~~T.Dee

It is not of course, huh?
>>Of course there isn't. Huh? (or Right?)

So this time, We will use the power of alcohol to get to know each other better.
>>So this time, we will use the power of alcohol to get to know each other better.
As you already could guess from the title, We will have a fun time introducing each countries' traditional or famous alcohol this time.
>>As you already could guess from the title, we will have a fun time introducing each countries' traditional or famous alcohol.

Please bring one that you want to introduce to us, and describe it as much as you can in detail so we can imagine it the best.
>>Please bring one that you want to introduce to us and describe it as much as you can in detail so we can imagine it as best as we can.
and also, freely drink your own drinks and talk about fun memories related to alcohol.
>>And also, you can freely drink your own drinks and talk about your fun memories related to alcohol.
Even if you get drunk, it still will be ok because you are in your safe zone.
>>CORRECT!
Let's blow our stress by doing this and have a fun Sunday together!
>>Let's blow away (Forget about) our stress and have a fun Sunday together!
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