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What are your fears? List some fears that you have and try to describe it through writing an essay.

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I tell you my fears list refer below.

1. Worry about health
2. My company sales
3. Worry about money
4. My english speak skill

The most important of these is number 1.
Without health, everything is meaningless.
2,3,4 depends on my efforts.
So, I strived to solve this matter.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Chris! Nicely done!

~Teacher Sheila


I tell you my fears list refer below.
>>CORRECT
OR>>>Refer below of my list of fears.

1. Worry about health
>>I worry about my health.

2. My company sales
>>I worry about my company sales.

3. Worry about money
>>I worry about money.

4. My english speak skill
>>I worry about my speaking skills in English.

The most important of these is number 1.
>>CORRECT

Without health, everything is meaningless.
>>CORRECT 
OR>>Without good health, everything is meaningless.

2,3,4 depends on my efforts.
>>2,3, and 4 depend on my efforts.

So, I strived to solve this matter.
>>CORRECT
OR>>So, I am striving to solve this matter.
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