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In 100years from now, how different do you think the natural world will be?

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I think natural world will be destroy or to make artificially. Because natural world is polluted a lot as the days go by. So maybe in the future we can make natural world artificially. Then it¡¯s not natural anymore but it can work same as natural world.

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Hi Heidi ! I do hope that people would not continue destroying our environment for future generations to come. 

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I think natural world will be destroy or to make artificially.
>> I think the world would be destroyed or be made artificially. 

Because natural world is polluted a lot as the days go by. 
>> Our world gets more polluted as days go by. 

So maybe in the future we can make natural world artificially. 
>> So maybe in the future, the world would be made artificially.

Then it¡¯s not natural anymore but it can work same as natural world.
>> It may not be natural anymore but it can work the same ways as the natural one. 
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