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What\'s the difference between the roles of teachers and parents in education?

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Teachers emphasize teaching academic and practical skills that students require in their professional life. In this case, practical skills would include social or communication skills to forge relationships with the people outside their territory. Whereas parents are more concerned with moral values and the reinforcement of every knowledge that their children learned from their tutors. Especially considering that the kids spend more time with their parents than their children, it would be more beneficial for parents to fill in the knowledge gap in daily life.

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Here's your third composition, Aciel. 

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Teachers emphasize teaching academic and practical skills that students require in their professional life. 
>> Teachers emphasize teaching academic and practical skills that students are required to possess in their professional lives.

In this case, practical skills would include social or communication skills to forge relationships with the people outside their territory. 
>> In this case, practical skills would include social or communication skills to forge relationships with the people outside their homes.
>> [I think using 'territory' in this context is too broad. It's better to use 'home'.]

Whereas parents are more concerned with moral values and the reinforcement of every knowledge that their children learned from their tutors.  Especially considering that the kids spend more time with their parents than their children, it would be more beneficial for parents to fill in the knowledge gap in daily life.
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