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Do we need to be honest all the time? Why or why not?
-> I think we don't need to be honest all time.
First, we can lie for children such as fantasy creature that children are believing.
Second, we can lie for someone who have to experience sad thing.
Third, we can lie for someone who wants to be praised to the other one.
That's why I think we don't need to be honest all time.

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                                           Do we need to be honest all the time? Why or why not?


-> I think we don't need to be honest all time.
>> or: I believe honesty at all times is unnecessary and even unwise. 

First, we can lie for children such as fantasy creature that children are believing.
>> First, we can lie to children, such as when we talk about fantasy or mythical creatures that children believe in. 

Second, we can lie for someone who have to experience sad thing.
>> Second, we can lie to someone who has experienced a sad thing.

Third, we can lie for someone who wants to be praised to the other one.
>> Third, we can lie to someone who wants to be praised by others, such as when we give compliments. 

That's why I think we don't need to be honest all time.
>> correct~~
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