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Describe an enjoyable dinner that you had with friends

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The most memorable dinner was what I had with friends before leaving Japan. I went to Japanese university, and I had to rush back to Korea after graduation due to pandemic and border closure between Japan. Thankfully, some of my friends organized farewell dinner at Italian restaurant. We had anchovy pasta and margarita pizza. We had a deep conversation about life after graduation. The main topic was about job-hunting and the application process for graduate school. I enjoyed the dinner because we were able to catch-up in the most difficult time and cheer each other up to get through the hardship.

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Here's your edited composition, Aciel. 

Cheers,
Jean~~
 

The most memorable dinner was what I had with friends before leaving Japan. 
>> The most unforgettable meal was what I had with my friends before leaving Japan. 

I went to Japanese university, and I had to rush back to Korea after graduation due to pandemic and border closure between Japan. 
>> I went to Japan for my higher education, and I had to rush back to Korea after graduation due to the pandemic and border closure between Japan and other countries. 

Thankfully, some of my friends organized farewell dinner at Italian restaurant. 
>> Thankfully, some of my friends organized a farewell dinner at an Italian restaurant. 

We had anchovy pasta and margarita pizza. 
>> We had an anchovy pasta and a margarita pizza. 

We had a deep conversation about life after graduation.
>> We had a profound conversation about life after graduation.

 The main topic was about job-hunting and the application process for graduate school. I enjoyed the dinner because we were able to catch-up in the most difficult time and cheer each other up to get through the hardship.
>> correct

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