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If you are going to save up some money for something, what would it be and why?
-> If I am going to save up some money for something, I think it will be a nice new bicycle.
First, I have my own bicycle, but I want more cool and light bike than my own bike.
Second, I want to show my cool and light bicycle to my friends.
Third, if I get a cool and light bicycle, I think I will very proud of myself that I bought that.
That's why if I am going to save up some money for something, I think it will be a nice new bicycle.

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Hi John! That sounds nice! That's why you should start saving up some money as early as now. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I am going to save up some money for something, I think it will be a nice new bicycle.
>> If I am going to save up some money for something, I think it will for a nice new bicycle.

First, I have my own bicycle, but I want more cool and light bike than my own bike.
>> I already have my own bicycle but I want a lighter and cooler one. 

Second, I want to show my cool and light bicycle to my friends.
>> If I will have one, I want to show it off to my friends. 

Third, if I get a cool and light bicycle, I think I will very proud of myself that I bought that.
>> I will be very proud of myself if I will have one of those. 

That's why if I am going to save up some money for something, I think it will be a nice new bicycle.
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