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My answer is "Yes". According to the study, First impression is judged in 3 seconds. If you don't dress well, you don't need to appeal who you are in job interview. For example, there are two guys. One guy is wearing a suit, tall, good body line and handsome, but he graded high school. Another person, He is a university professor but he is smaller then another guy, obese and wearing dirty cloths. When they have a discussion, many people agree with first guy. It can apply on crimes. Last year, a woman had a press interview. Because she had to apologize about taking drugs for several years. At that time, she didn't wear a mask to show her innocent(or beautiful) face, and she wore a white blouse and black pants. When people see her appearance, nobody thinks that she is a drug criminal.

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Physical Appearance

My answer is "Yes". According to the study, First impression is judged in 3 seconds. 
>>> My answer is "yes". According to the study, the first impression is judged within 3 seconds. 

If you don't dress well, you don't need to appeal who you are in job interview.
>>> If you don't dress well, you don't need to appeal to who you are in a job interview.

For example, there are two guys. One guy is wearing a suit, tall, good body line and handsome, but he graded high school.
>>> For example, there are two guys. One guy is wearing a suit, tall, handsome, and has a good body, but he's a high school graduate. 

Another person, He is a university professor but he is smaller then another guy, obese and wearing dirty cloths. 
>>> The other guy is a university professor but he is smaller than another guy, obese, and usually wears dirty clothes. 

When they have a discussion, many people agree with first guy. It can apply on crimes. 
>>> When they have a discussion, many people will agree with the first guy. It can apply to crimes as well. 

Last year, a woman had a press interview. Because she had to apologize about taking drugs for several years.
>>> Last year, a woman had a press interview because she had to apologize for taking drugs for several years.

At that time, she didn't wear a mask to show her innocent(or beautiful) face, and she wore a white blouse and black pants. 
>>> At that time, she didn't wear a mask to show that she's innocent or to show her beautiful face, instead, she wore a white blouse and black pants. 

When people see her appearance, nobody thinks that she is a drug criminal.
>>> When people saw her appearance, nobody thinks that she is a drug criminal.
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