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How can travelling be educational?
-> If there is educational things or structures, it can be educational travelling.
When we learn some structures or some places, it is good to go to the structures or the places.
Also it is very good to see the things or the relics that we learned at the school or other places.
If we do that things, we can learn more thing about something that we learned or we interested in.
So I think if there is educational things or structures, I think it could be good for education.

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Hi John! That's true! Traveling is very educational and fun. Not only will you be enjoying, but you'll get to know a lot of new things too! :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If there is educational things or structures, it can be educational travelling.
>>If there are educational things or structures, it can be educational for the traveler. 

When we learn some structures or some places, it is good to go to the structures or the places.
>> It is good to learn about the history of a place based on its infrastructures. 

Also it is very good to see the things or the relics that we learned at the school or other places.
>> It's also good to see the things i that we usually just study through books in person. 

If we do that things, we can learn more thing about something that we learned or we interested in.
>> If we do those things, we can learn a lot and get more interested in it. 

So I think if there is educational things or structures, I think it could be good for education.\
>> So I think, if there are educational things or structures, it can be educational for the traveler. 
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