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There are many researches about effect of listening music. If you listen to music before taking a test, you can get a higher score than before. In my case, when I was depressed, I listened Rock Ballades. After listening the music, I felt better. I am not a person, Who does not like to listen to music. But, It works even me. So, I think, Music can be a therapy. As well as there are so many songs for couples who break up.

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There are many researches about effect of listening music. 
>>> There are much researches done about the effect of listening to music. 

If you listen to music before taking a test, you can get a higher score than before. 
>>> If you listen to music before taking a test, you can get a higher score than those people who don't. 

In my case, when I was depressed, I listened Rock Ballades. After listening the music, I felt better. 
>>> In my case, when I am depressed, I listen to rock ballades. After listening to the music, I felt better. 

I am not a person, Who does not like to listen to music. But, It works even me. 
>>> I am not a person who likes to listen to music that much but it works even for me. 

So, I think, Music can be a therapy. As well as there are so many songs for couples who break up. 
>>> So, I think, music can be a therapy. As well as there are so many songs for every kind of emotion such as when couples break up. 
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