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What is your favorite music genre?

작성자: 정*원
2021-03-15 4405

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My favorite music genre is movie OST that is abbreviation of Original Soud Track. Music is not just sound in movie, it appeals many things with a plenty of images and feelings depend on the listener's tendency. When I listen movie OST
, I can make a story with the beauriful acene or the exciting scene that I was impressed through movies. Sometimes, just sound of natures, such as waves, wind, water atreaming, and animals crying make me relax. That is one of Original Sound Track.
For example, the Jaws is horror movie directed by Steven Spielberg which is famouse for suspenseful music. The movie director use suitable nature sounds on the each scenes of Jaws. If people saw the Jaws without music, they felt much less scary. The genre of movie OST is more implicit than other genre of music for me. It is the eason that I like it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Young Won!

It is ingenious that you choose a movie's original sound track to be your favorite movie. I also love listening to piano instrumentals of Disney movies but I have never thought of other OST to add to my play list.

Nonetheless, they are absolutely interesting specially those that are used in cartoons.

Thanks for sharing your favorite music genre, it was systematically written.

See you tomorrow!

-T. Donna =)

My favorite music genre is movie OST that is abbreviation of Original Soud Track. 
>> Correct! 
Or: My favorite music genre is the movie OST, that is the abbreviation of Original Sound Track. 

Music is not just sound in movie, it appeals many things with a plenty of images and feelings depend on the listener's tendency. 
>>  Music is not just a sound in a movie, it appeals to many things with a plenty of images and feelings depending on the listener's tendency. 

When I listen movie OST, I can make a story with the beauriful acene or the exciting scene that I was impressed through movies. 
>> When I listen to movie OST, I can make a story with the beautiful or the exciting scene that I was impressed with through movies.  

Sometimes, just sound of natures, such as waves, wind, water atreaming, and animals crying make me relax. 
>> Sometimes, just the sound of nature such as waves, wind, water streaming, and animals crying make me feel relaxed. 

That is one of Original Sound Track.
>> That is one of the Original Sound Tracks.

For example, the Jaws is horror movie directed by Steven Spielberg which is famouse for suspenseful music. 
>> For example, Jaws is a horror movie directed by Steven Spielberg which is famous for its suspenseful music. 

The movie director use suitable nature sounds on the each scenes of Jaws. 
>> The movie director used a suitable nature sounds on each scene of Jaws. 

If people saw the Jaws without music, they felt much less scary. 
>> If people saw Jaws without music, they would feel much less scared. 

The genre of movie OST is more implicit than other genre of music for me. It is the eason that I like it.
>> The genre of a movie OST is more implicit than other genre of music for me. It is the reason that I like it.
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