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Homework should be limited

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Most students dislike homework because it is boring and uninteresting. However, if homework is abolished at school, students would not study more and more.
I think if students focus on their homework, they can finish it quickly and don't need to do it until night. Then students can do other activities in their spare time. Also I think that homework allows students to extend their education.
Therefore, homework is essential for students.

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Good evening sir Andy. Thank you for taking the time to give your opinion about this topic.  I'm amazed with your answers and sentences sir. Most of them are perfectly said. I like your ideas. ^_^
T. Irene
Most students dislike homework because it is boring and uninteresting. 
>>> Correct. 
However, if homework is abolished at school, students would not study more and more.
>>> However, if homework is abolished at school, students would not study hard.
I think if students focus on their homework, they can finish it quickly and don't need to do it until night. 
>>> Correct. 
OR
>>> I think if students focus on their homework, they can finish it quickly and don't need to do it until  late at night. 
Then students can do other activities in their spare time. 
>>> Correct. 
Also, I think that homework allows students to extend their education.
>>> Correct. 
OR
>>>  I also think that homework allows students to learn more.
Therefore, homework is essential for students.
>>> Correct. 


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