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Because of the bias of wealth, dispute.
Also the political system collapsed due to the war between countries.
Corona virus has made poverty worse.
We can help them.
First, donate money to help the poor.
Second, volunteering is a good idea.

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Hi there Eden! It's a rainy day here! I hope you're enjoying your time today. Thank your doing your essay!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Because of the bias of wealth, dispute.
>>> Because of the unfair system.
Also the political system collapsed due to the war among countries.
>>> CORRECT
Corona virus has made poverty worse.
>>> Coronavirus has worsen poverty.
First, donate money to help the poor.
>>> First, we have to donate money to help the poor.
Second, volunteering is a good idea.
>>> CORRECT
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