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What are the pros and cons of working out?

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I am not sure if there are the cons of working out.
The cons of exercise may be that we taks the time to exercise, make an effort and sometimes cost money.
Most of people agree to need working out and want to exercise.
But they might feel it is difficult to ptactice regularly, including me.
If we work out regularly, we can be having many advantages for like.
We can enjoy not only physical health but also mental health.
I think if we want an active life, we have to do work out.

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Hi Lily,
Thank you for your ideas!
Keep up the good work!
Have a nice day.
Teacher Elly.
What are the pros and cons of working out?
I am not sure if there are the cons of working out.
>>I am not sure if there are some cons in terms of working out.
The cons of exercise may be that we taks the time to exercise, make an effort and sometimes cost money.
>>The negative things about exercising may include having to set aside some time to exercise, the effort we have to exert and sometimes, it costs money.
Most of people agree to need working out and want to exercise.
>>Most people agree that they need to work out and so they want to exercise.
But they might feel it is difficult to ptactice regularly, including me.
>>But they feel that it is difficult to practice regularly, including me.
If we work out regularly, we can be having many advantages for like.
>>If we work out regularly, we can have many advantages in life.
We can enjoy not only physical health but also mental health.
>>We will enjoy not only physical health, but also mental health.
I think if we want an active life, we have to do work out.
>>I think if we want an active life, we have to work out.
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