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Q:What interests you about space/universe?
A:I'm interest about planets and stars in the space.
First, planets and stars are very interesting and mystery.
Second, there are many planets and stars and they have their own features.
Last, many things are happening in the space.

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Hello Paul! You are doing great with your homework every day! 

~Teacher Sheila


I'm interest about planets and stars in the space.
>>I'm interested about planets and stars in space.

First, planets and stars are very interesting and mystery.
>>First, planets and stars are very interesting and mysterious.

Second, there are many planets and stars and they have their own features.
>>CORRECT

Last, many things are happening in the space.
>>Last many things are happening in space.
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