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What is the importance of having time with your family?
-> It is very important to having time with my family.
Family, is a special group and it effects to our life.
And we are living because of each parents, so we have to thanks to our parents.
Also we have to help my family because family is a special group.
So we have to have times with our family.
I think it is very very important to having time with my family.

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Hi John! I agree with you. Nothing gives us more comfort than spending time with our family. We usually underestimate it but it's actually a very therapeutic thing to do. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

It is very important to having time with my family.
>> It is very important to have time with family.

Family, is a special group and it effects to our life.
>> Our family is a special group that affects us in our lives. 

And we are living because of each parents, so we have to thanks to our parents
>> We exist because of our parents and we have to give thanks. 

Also we have to help my family because family is a special group.
>> We also need to help them. 

So we have to have times with our family.
>> That's why we need to spend some time with them. 

I think it is very very important to having time with my family.
>> I think it is very important to have some quality time with family. 

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