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The most boring job.

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After doing military service, I could get a part-time job. At that time, my mother had worked a factory, she introduced me to the factory.
The factory has been producing some parts of car's Air conditioner. While I worked at the factory, I removed particles from a part what was cut by a machine for 8 hours every week days. It was so boring, I couldn't stand especially last time of every day. That period was winter season, while I was working I fired gas heater. After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, "If you doze one more, You
fire." I couldn't doze anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn't my job. I have to study hard to get my ideal job.

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Hello Kim Il Hwan,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!


Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


After doing military service, I could get a part-time job. 
>>> After doing military service, I want to get a part-time job. 

At that time, my mother had worked a factory, she introduced me to the factory.
>>> At that time, my mother had worked in a factory, so she recommended me to work in the factory.

The factory has been producing some parts of car's Air conditioner. 
>>> The factory has been producing some parts of cars' air conditioner. 

While I worked at the factory, I removed particles from a part what was cut by a machine for 8 hours every week days. 
>>> My main job in the factory is to remove particles from a part that was cut by a machine for 8 hours every weekday. 

It was so boring, I couldn't stand especially last time of every day.
>>> It was so boring that I couldn't stand especially the last time of every day. 

That period was winter season, while I was working I fired gas heater. 
>>> That period was the winter season, while I was working I accidentally fired a gas heater. 

After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, "If you doze one more, You fire." 
>>> After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, "If you doze off one more, you fire." 

I couldn't doze anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn't my job. 
>>> I couldn't afford to doze off anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn't the job for me. 

I have to study hard to get my ideal job.
>>> CORRECT

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