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In my perspective, I am not that much interested in wild life.
But, I think it is a very important thing living in today's world, especially, in terms of wild animals.
These days, people waste nature for their benefit such as, cutting trees and mountains that is necessarily for wild animals, throwing trashes on the road, and so on. Even if it is beneficial for people, wild animals are suffering from this, because they lose their home, become sick by eating trashes that people throw into nature and lose their feeds. So, we can preserve nature, wild life.

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Hello Sunny!

I totally agree that we need to preserve nature because we cannot wait until it is too late. Now that we still have some parts of nature, we need to protect and let it grow.

Unfortunately, man is naturally greedy. So we have to educate them to love nature as they love themselves.

See you in class in a few moments.

-T. Donna =)

In my perspective, I am not that much interested in wild life.
>> Correct!

But, I think it is a very important thing living in today's world, especially, in terms of wild animals.
>> Correct!
Or: Remove al commas.

These days, people waste nature for their benefit such as, cutting trees and mountains that is necessarily for wild animals, throwing trashes on the road, and so on. 
>> These days, people waste nature for their benefit such as cutting trees and eroding mountains that are necessary for wild animals. They  also throw trashes on the road, and so on.

Even if it is beneficial for people, wild animals are suffering from this, because they lose their home, become sick by eating trashes that people throw into nature and lose their feeds. So, we can preserve nature, wild life.
>> Even if it is beneficial for people, wild animals are suffering from these because they lose their home, become sick by eating trashes that people throw into nature, and lose their food. So, we need to preserve nature and wild life.
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