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I think the invention of smartphone is the best technology for people.
This is because, this technology can make us live more convenient rather than before. To be specific, many people can look for information, calling someone in the case of emergency faster and enjoy some fun videos. It makes us do this at the same time and now, people may not live without this technology. So, it is like an air that is necessarily for people living in today's world.

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Hi there Sunny!

Most of us cannot imagine a world without smartphones. We can work using them, communicate and even entertain ourselves using this technology.

I am sure at times you also use it in our class to understand concepts better.

Thanks for this answer to my question.

I will see you in class in a few.

-T. Donna =)

I think the invention of smartphone is the best technology for people.
>> Correct!

This is because, this technology can make us live more convenient rather than before. 
>> Correct!
(Or: Remove comma.)

To be specific, many people can look for information, calling someone in the case of emergency faster and enjoy some fun videos. 
>> To be specific, many people can look for information, call someone in case of emergency faster, and enjoy some fun videos. 

It makes us do this at the same time and now, people may not live without this technology. 
>> Correct!

So, it is like an air that is necessarily for people living in today's world.
>>  So, it is like an air that is necessary for people living in today's world.
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