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What do you think will happen if your country is overpopulated?

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well.. I watched document TV shows about overpopulating. we can't avoid it. as the time pass away, we'll prepare something against a lot of problems in advance. Food is one of the problem. so many scientists are trying to solve this. last year, they succeeded incubating cells to make meat. In future, we'll solve food problem by eating this. I think real meat will be so expensive so only rich people will eat this and the other people will eat meat made by cells.

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Hi Tobby! The quality of live overall would be affected if overpopulations is present. That's why the government should take notice of the inflation of population in their country. :)

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well.. I watched document TV shows about overpopulating. 
>> Well, I have watched a documentary about overpopulation. 

we can't avoid it. 
>> We can't avoid it. 

as the time pass away, we'll prepare something against a lot of problems in advance. 
>>As the time passes by, we have to prepare for a lot of things in advance. 

Food is one of the problem. so many scientists are trying to solve this. 
>>Food is one of the problems so many scientists are trying to solve this. 

last year, they succeeded incubating cells to make meat. 
>>Last year, they succeeded incubating cells to make meat. 

In future, we'll solve food problem by eating this.
>>In future, we'll solve food problem with this. 

I think real meat will be so expensive so only rich people will eat this and the other people will eat meat made by cells
>> 
I think real meat will be so expensive so only rich people will afford it and other people will eat artificial meat. 

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