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Tell me something about your hometown.

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My hometown is Goseo in Jeonlado in South Korea which is far from Seoul about four hours by driving. Goseo is a very small country village. I was born in there, my grand parents' house, same with my father. I was grown up there untill 6 years old but I can remember several things about my hometown.
Most people who lived in Goseo, cultivated rice, some others farmed fruits and vegetables. Especially, my hometown is famouse for bamboo trees and bamboo creafts such as a basket, a carpet, and a curtain.
When I visited there lately, I felt comfotable and recalled my childhood memories. My hometown is still beautiful and unvanished place.

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Hello Young Won!

Your hometown seems to be a very peaceful and robust farm place. I grew up in a small city and had little exposure to your kind of hometown. However, it is always a great wonder how the land give so much produce and happiness to the people in that place.

Well, thank you for imparting information about your hometown. As the  saying goes- "Home is where the heart is.".

See you again in class tomorrow.

-T. Donna =)

My hometown is Goseo in Jeonlado in South Korea which is far from Seoul about four hours by driving. 
>> Correct!

Goseo is a very small country village. I was born in there, my grand parents' house, same with my father. 
>> Goseo is a very small country village. I was born there in my grand parents' house, same as my father. 

I was grown up there untill 6 years old but I can remember several things about my hometown.
>> I grew up there until 6 years old but I can still remember several things about my hometown.

Most people who lived in Goseo, cultivated rice, some others farmed fruits and vegetables. 
>> Correct!

Especially, my hometown is famouse for bamboo trees and bamboo creafts such as a basket, a carpet, and a curtain.
>> Correct!
Or: famous, crafts (SPELLING)

When I visited there lately, I felt comfotable and recalled my childhood memories. 
>> Correct!
Or: comfortable (SPELLING)

My hometown is still beautiful and unvanished place.
>> My hometown is still beautiful and an unvanished/ untarnished place.
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