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Is dancing a form of art?
- Yes I agree. I think that is some of part. The dancing is expression with body. Because Art is expreession about myself, human, life, things and so on. So It is just different how about expressions.

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Hi Miss Ella! Thank you for taking time to answer the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, you did great. Keep it up! :)
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Yes I agree.
>> CORRECT!

I think that is some of part.
>> I think some part of it is an art.

The dancing is expression with body. 
>> Dancing is a form of expression, because we use our body to express something about ourselves, our life, and so on.

Because Art is expreession about myself, human, life, things and so on. 
>> Dancing is a form of expression, because we use our body to express something about ourselves, our life, and so on.

So It is just different how about expressions.
>> Sometimes, we express out emotions differently.
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