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As the society has become more globalised, the number of people who study english has significantly increased. I strongly believe that good english skills are beneficial for everyone who are living in global society. This essay will describe several reasons why english fluency is significant for me.
First, good english skills may increase my chances to get a job in a multinational company or even in abroad. It may broad the opportunity of having jobs. Having high quality of english will also be the language of international communication, so it is crucial for socialising.
Second, good english skills might lead me to be able to express my own ideas fluently to others. It may boost my confidence and also easy to hang out with foreign people.
In conclusoion, there are various reasons why outstanding english skills are advantageous. It may be favourable for governments to support english classes for citizens.

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Hi Emily! This is true. Learning how to speak in English is very beneficial to a person because it will open you to a wider opportunity career wise. So keep up the good work in your classes :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!


As the society has become more globalised, the number of people who study english has significantly increased. 
>>As the society becomes more globalized, the number of people who study English has significantly increased. 

I strongly believe that good english skills are beneficial for everyone who are living in global society. 
>>I strongly believe that good English skills are beneficial for everyone who is living in a global society. 

This essay will describe several reasons why english fluency is significant for me.
>> This essay will describe several reasons why English fluency is significant for me.

First, good english skills may increase my chances to get a job in a multinational company or even in abroad. 
>>First, good English skills may increase my chances to get a job in a multinational company or even in abroad. 

It may broad the opportunity of having jobs. 
>> My opportunities will become broad. 

Having high quality of english will also be the language of international communication, so it is crucial for socialising.
>> Having high quality of English skills can be used when communicating internationally. This is  crucial for socializing.


Second, good english skills might lead me to be able to express my own ideas fluently to others. It may boost my confidence and also easy to hang out with foreign people.
>> Second, good English skills might lead me to be able to express my own ideas fluently to others. It may boost my confidence which will make it easier to hang out with foreign people.


In conclusoion, there are various reasons why outstanding english skills are advantageous. It may be favourable for governments to support english classes for citizens.
>> In conclusion, there are various reasons why being good in English is beneficial. It may be favorable if the government supports the citizens with their English classes. 

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