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Korea had a lot of invasions from other countries. Japan colonized Korea and raped everything such as people, resources, and cultures between 1910 year and 1945 year. After independence from Japan, there was a war between communism came from Soviet and Democracy came from America. The war named Korean War. It happened on June, 25th, 1950 and finished on July, 27th, 1953. Due to Korean War, Korea was separated to North Korea and South Korea. In the middle of Korea land, there is a specific belt called DMZ which is demilitarized zone. From there 2 km to the north and 2 km to the south, both side of communism and democracy promised that there wouldn't troops for the armistice. Families also was divided. They couldn't across the the area to see their relatives. DMZ is the saddest historical place in the world.

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Hello Young Won!

This composition is very informative and well-written! Thanks for this answer. See you on our two-part class in a while.

-T. Donna =)

Korea had a lot of invasions from other countries. 
>> Correct!
Or if you mean: Korea had a lot of invasions from other countries. 

Japan colonized Korea and raped everything such as people, resources, and cultures between 1910 year and 1945 year. 
>> Correct!

After independence from Japan, there was a war between communism came from Soviet and Democracy came from America. 
>> After independence from Japan, there was a war between communism that came from the Soviet Union and Democracy came from America. 

The war named Korean War. It happened on June, 25th, 1950 and finished on July, 27th, 1953. 
>> The war named Korean War happened on June 25th, 1950 and finished on July 27th, 1953. 

Due to Korean War, Korea was separated to North Korea and South Korea. In the middle of Korea land, there is a specific belt called DMZ which is demilitarized zone. 
>> Due to the Korean War, Korea was separated to North Korea and South Korea. In the middle of the Korea land, there is a specific belt called DMZ which is a demilitarized zone. 

From there 2 km to the north and 2 km to the south, both side of communism and democracy promised that there wouldn't troops for the armistice. 
>> From there, 2 kilometers to the north and 2 kilometers to the south, both sides of communism and democracy promised that there wouldn't troops for armistice. 

Families also was divided. 
>> Families were also divided.

They couldn't across the the area to see their relatives. DMZ is the saddest historical place in the world.
>> They couldn't cross the the area to see their relatives. DMZ is the saddest historical place in the world.
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