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I used to go the cinema when I dated with my wife. It is good place to spend time and have fun because I can watch interesting movies and also eat snacks. If it is beginning of date for couples, it can be a good chance to have skin ship because of the mood in the theater. People go the the cinema to enjoy movies that is seen wide screen and is listened to the best sound whereas, others just have a great time with their partner. However, many people buy wide TV which is more than 85 inch and purchase the sound bar as well. So, they can enjoy movies at home enough. They don't need to spend money for every person. We can simply buy contents on the website such as Netfilx. Some people insist to watch it in the theater because it is the way to help actors and producers. I partially agree with that because we used to have problems to download many contents by free but most people have changed. People would like to pay whatever they want to watch or listen to these days.

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! Hard work is the most important key to success. Without being willing to work hard and put everything into a venture, effective study is nearly impossible. Keep going!
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I used to go the cinema when I dated with my wife.
>>> CORRECT
 It is good place to spend time and have fun because I can watch interesting movies and also eat snacks.
>>>  It is a good place to spend time and have fun because I can watch interesting movies and also eat snacks.
 If it is beginning of date for couples, it can be a good chance to have skin ship because of the mood in the theater. 
>>>  If couples start dating, it can be a good chance to have skin ship because of the mood in the theater. 
People go the the cinema to enjoy movies that is seen wide screen and is listened to the best sound whereas, others just have a great time with their partner. 
>>> People go the the cinema to enjoy movies which are seen in a wide screen and is heard to the best sound whereas, others just have a great time with their partner. 
However, many people buy wide TV which is more than 85 inch and purchase the sound bar as well.
>>> However, many people buy wide TV which is more than 85 inches and purchase the sound bar as well.
 So, they can enjoy movies at home enough. 
>>>  So, they can enjoy enough movies at home . 
They don't need to spend money for every person. (true :D)
>>> CORRECT
We can simply buy contents on the website such as Netfilx. 
>>> We can simply buy contents on the website like Netfilx.
Some people insist to watch it in the theater because it is the way to help actors and producers.
>>> Some people insist to watch at the theater because it is a way of helping actors and producers.
 I partially agree with that because we used to have problems to download many contents by free but most people have changed. 
>>> CORREC
People would like to pay whatever they want to watch or listen to these days.
>>> CORREC
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