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I agree with the quote. Because people do things that takes a lot of time like sending letters to another country, going country to country.
>> I agree with the quote because people do things that take a lot of time, such as sending letters to another country, going country to country, and so on.

 Mobile phone reduced time. It connected people. So people can do works by some touches.
>>  Mobile phones reduce time. They connect people. So people can do their work by some getting in touch with each other. 
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