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Overall, our midern society need to digitization that is very understandable but we have to sducate our children to read paper books for letting know our ancestor's spirit. Rare and valuable books are never replaced with electronic books.

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Yet today, we have to still teach children the value of reading and where what they read came from.

I agree that we have to let our children touch printed books before they are all gone.

A well done and explained composition! See you later in class, Young Won.

-T. Donna =)

Overall, our midern society need to digitization that is very understandable but we have to sducate our children to read paper books for letting know our ancestor's spirit. 
>> Overall, our modern society needs digitization that is very understandable but we have to educate our children to read paper books for letting them know about our ancestors' spirits. 

Rare and valuable books are never replaced with electronic books.
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