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GOOD DAY EDEN! ^^ 
Be thankful for what you have; you¡¯ll end up having more. If you concentrate on what you don¡¯t have, you will never, ever have enough.
You¡¯re going to go through tough times - that¡¯s life. But I say, ¡®Nothing happens to you, it happens for you.¡¯ See the positive in negative events.
Have a nice day~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think it is positive development.
>>> I think it is a positive development.
If you finish work immediately, you won't miss the deadline.
>>> CORRECT
You may have free time because you have finished your work.
>>> CORRECT
But even if you finish quickly, you have to make sure you are not doing anything working or perfect.
>>> But even if you finish quickly, you have to make sure you are doing it perfectly.
You'd better not put off your work.
>>> CORRECT
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