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Divorce

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2021-03-24 2816

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In my country, many people have thought that the divorce was very serious problem and it is never good thing.
However, today, there are lots of couples who divorce each other. Even if it is still serious problem, many people are changing their thinking about this. As for me, it is a thing that has to still avoid as you can as possible.

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Hi Sunny!

We need to understand the context of why people need to file for divorce. After all, we are not in their shoes to judge them.

Thank you for submitting this piece of writing and see you in a few minutes.

-T. Donna =)

In my country, many people have thought that the divorce was very serious problem and it is never good thing.
>> In my country, many people have thought that the divorce is a very serious problem and it is never a good thing.

However, today, there are lots of couples who divorce each other. 
>> Correct!

Even if it is still serious problem, many people are changing their thinking about this. 
>> Even if it is still a serious problem, many people are changing their thinking about this. 

As for me, it is a thing that has to still avoid as you can as possible.
>> As for me, it is a thing that has to still be avoided as much as possible.
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