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Which one do you like more, relaxing travels or adventurous travel? Explain your answer.
-> I like relaxing travels more than adventurous travels.
My purpose of traveling is resting, not a doing adventure.
I am studing hard at my school and my house, so I have to rest sometime.
And the time of resting is traveling to me.
So I like relaxing travels more than adventurous travels.

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Hi John! Yes, sometimes we need some days off and traveling is a good way to do it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

 I like relaxing travels more than adventurous travels.
>>CORRECT

My purpose of traveling is resting, not a doing adventure.
>>My purpose of traveling is to rest, not doing adventures.

I am studing hard at my school and my house, so I have to rest sometime.
>>I study hard in my school and my house, so I need to have some rest time. 

And the time of resting is traveling to me.
>> All my travel trips are resting time. 

So I like relaxing travels more than adventurous travels.
>> CORRECT
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