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If you had the chance to change your name, would you do it? Why or why not?

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I won't because I already had a experience to change my name. here's a story. as soon as I was born, I had heart disease. My name was Tae Jung which means being big. My grandmather ask monk how I could heal disease. so He recommanded to changing my name. After changing name, surgury was well. so that's why I am here. I'll never change my name. currently, my name is Woo Jung. It means being comfortable like home.

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Hi Tobby! Wow that's a very interesting story. I think your name is already unique and you shouldn't change it anymore. :)

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I won't because I already had a experience to change my name. 
>> I won't because I already had an experience changing my name. 

here's a story. as soon as I was born, I had heart disease. 
>> Here's the story. When I was born, I had a heart disease. 

My name was Tae Jung which means being big. 
>> CORRECT

My grandmather ask monk how I could heal disease. so He recommanded to changing my name. 
>>My grandmother asked a monk on how the disease would be healed and he recommended to change my name.

After changing name, surgury was well. so that's why I am here. 
>>After changing my name, the surgery went well that's why I am here. 

I'll never change my name. currently, my name is Woo Jung. 
>>I'll never change my name. Currently, my name is Woo Jung. 

It means being comfortable like home.
>>CORRECT
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