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What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad?
-> I think there is lots of advetages and disadventages of studying aboard.
First, adventage, we can study some parts more professionally than my country.
Also we can get a better skills of speaking that country's language than my country.
And we can learn different cultures and also we can see lots of structures.
Second, disadventages, we couldn't see our families because of studying aboard.
Also we may do lots of mistakes because of the different cultures.
And we couldn't eat our home food because of studying aboard.
That's why I think there is lots of various adventages and disadventages of studying aboard.

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Hi John! I think both of them have advantages and disadvantages at the same time too. You can benefit a lot and have a hard time as well. It just depends on how you're going to handle your situation abroad. :) 

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I think there is lots of advetages and disadventages of studying aboard.
>>I think there is a lot of advantages and disadvantages in studying aboard.

First, adventage, we can study some parts more professionally than my country.
>>First advantage is that we can study some parts more professionally than your native country. 

Also we can get a better skills of speaking that country's language than my country.
>> Also, we can get a better skills in speaking that country's language.

And we can learn different cultures and also we can see lots of structures.
>>We can learn different cultures and also see lots of structures.

Second, disadventages, we couldn't see our families because of studying aboard.
>> Second disadvantages is that we couldn't see our families. 

Also we may do lots of mistakes because of the different cultures.
>> CORRECT

And we couldn't eat our home food because of studying aboard.
>>We might miss eating native foods. 

That's why I think there is lots of various adventages and disadventages of studying aboard.
>> That's why I think there is lots of various advantages and disadvantages of studying aboard.

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