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These days, there are many fitness programs such as applications that I can choose. I choose two categories that I think ideal programs.
The first thing is a kind of exercise diary that has many functions to help users who want to be more healthy. Main functions are recording doing like eating, working, drinking, and so on. Furthermore, if a user gets a no-free membership, she/he can get feedback from a fitness coach. I think that function is very useful and helpful for users to make regularly good habits.
The second thing is an exercise video that has yoga, stretching and muscling, and so on. This function has some special things like making a customizing to fit by user's condition such as counting and speed. I think that function is getting more fit my body condition.

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Good afternoon Amy! 
I would love to try this app too. 
Thanks for sharing^^ 

These days, there are many fitness programs such as applications that I can choose. 
>>> These days, there are many fitness programs such as applications that I can choose.
I choose two categories that I think ideal programs.
>>> I choose two ideal programs that I think.
The first thing is a kind of exercise diary that has many functions to help users who want to be more healthy. 
>>> The first is a kind of exercise diary that has many functions to help users who want to be healthier.
Main functions are recording doing like eating, working, drinking, and so on. 
>>> The main functions are recording such as eating, working, and drinking.
Furthermore, if a user gets a no-free membership, she/he can get feedback from a fitness coach. 
>>> Furthermore, once a user gets a free membership, he or she can get feedback from a fitness coach.
I think that function is very useful and helpful for users to make regularly good habits.
>>> I think the function is very useful and helpful to make good habits for users on a regular basis.
The second thing is an exercise video that has yoga, stretching and muscling, and so on. 
>>> The second is an exercise video with yoga, stretching, muscle exercises, etc.
This function has some special things like making a customizing to fit by user's condition such as counting and speed. 
>>> This feature has several special features, such as customizing the speed depending on the user's condition. 
I think that function is getting more fit my body condition.
>>> I think the function fits my physical condition more and more.

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